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Reference from IELTS WRITE RIGHT authored by Julian Charles


Above all, we ought to know the standard of band system is the same as WRITING TASK 1:

  1. Task Achievement
  2. Coherence and Cohesion
  3. Lexical Resources
  4. Grammatical Range and Accuracy

Since I have already illustrated the meanings of these four rules in the last article, I would not to explore them in this section.

By contrast, this part doesn't give specific information but show only a semi-open topic or point for you to debate and commment. It's a kind of argumentative writings, you're supposed to give a clear-cut and distinctive perspertive. These are four types of questions:

  1. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
  2. Discuss both sides(views) and give your own opinion
  3. Do you think the advantages of ... overweight the disadvantages
    /disadvantages of ... overweight the advantages
  4. Discuss causes, effects and/or solutions

In the third section - Model Answers, I have prepared several excellent compositions for you. However, most importantly, you need to pay much attention to the structure of the article before considering the detailed expressions.

Follows are some types of frames you can use in your writing:

1Intr. Choose one sideReason 1Reason 2Conc.
2Intr. Choose one sideSide one - My viewAnother side - Concession & RefutationConc.
3Intr. Choose one sideSide one - ConcessionAnother side - My view - RefutationConc.
4Intr. Choose one side / new aspectSide one / Reason 1Another side / Reason 2Conc. My view

(*intr. = introduction, conc. = conclusion)

Instruction for Writing

Here we define two terms - Relationship of Objects and Reasoning Chain

1. Relationship of Objects - First Pharagraph

We must to figure out how the objects are related to each other - the relationship between them before we write our composition.

Most of leaders and directors of organizations are older people. Some people think it is better to have young people for these positions.

The statement above reveals that one object is older people as the leader of organizations and another object is youngster doing it. They are in an adversarial relationship.

Some people claim that public museums and art gallery will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computer.

Notice the word 'because', there is an adversarial relationship between using computer to tour and keeping actual museums and gallery plus causal relationship. See the two bold parts? We call them objects.

Some people believe countries have moral obligation to help each other, others worry about the money cannot get to the poor of this world.

The objects are easy to find but the relationship between them is not contrary. Others may not disagree with humanitarian aid and they're only worried about the wrong direction of the money going to. Two are different layers of one issue - moral help among countries. And for this kind of question, it is very suitable to show new aspect of view

Therefore, in the introdution of our composition, we should identify the relation of different objects. Then we can give our opinion - to choose one side to demonstrate or to show new aspect of view.

2. Reasoning Chain - Second/Third Pharagraph

What's the meaning of reasoning chain? It can be explained in the following flow chart. It's a way but not only way to spread your opinion.

reasoning chain

Here are some examples:

Start PointSpecificSupplementEnd Point
watch televisionsome kinds of historical program, political news and latest reviews to hotspotLeaning new knowledges which are not gotten in textbooksBroaden our horizon with expending the scope of knowleage
global spead of the same productsinternational brands oust a nation's traditional objectsJapanese crafted teapot ceremony vanishespose a threat to cultural diversity of a nation

Next, I would select the second example to show how to link the four parts of reasoning chain (start point, specific, supplement and end point) together:

First of all, the global spread of the same products pose a threat to cultural diversity of a nation. To be specific, if these relentless advance of international brands into every corner of the world continues, those bland packages might one day completely oust a nation's traditional objects, which are inextricably linked to its history, language and ethos. In this case, there would be a loss of richness and diversity of culture for a country. For instance, if Japanese sepecially crafted teapot ceremony would vanish as well for the invasion of industrially produced teapot, thus destroying one of the unique and well-known features that represent this country.

Besides using reasoning chain, there are also having other ways to spread your opinion. For instance, using the Structure of Concession & Refutation but it's also based the structure of reasoning chain.

First of all, it is an undeniable fact that consuming fast food to excess results in serious health problems. Foods such as fried chicken, hamburgers and chips - which are incredibly high in fat and salt - are responsible for such ailments as high blood pressure, obesity and heart disease. Moreover, although I certainly agree that fast food is both affordable and convenient, the cost and inconvenience of treating the illnesses it causes in later life are significant. In other words, while fast food is beneficial in the short term, its long-term effects are generally negative.

Or using completely detailed examples to exemplify your point

Further and even more importantly, though (=however/nevertheless), some fast food chains deleberately attempt to attract children in order to shape their future eating habits. One particularly good example of this is the character Ronald McDonald - the bright clothes and smile of the McDonalds clown are a beacon to children. Having grown up eating in McDonalds restaurants, people are likely to continue eating there throughout their adult lives. It is also interesting to note that McDonalds provides playgrounds and frequently holds children's birthday parties in order to attract young children and their parents.

Or using All Logical Analysis to argue your side.

The lack of long term concentration and distraction are two of the problems that dwarf many advantages the new media bring. Due to the innovation and development of technology, we are more easily to be informed of non-stop news every moment. The news, which is broadcasted frequently, covers a wide range of information which might be too trivial and fragmentory. Although it may hallucinate those who are informed of the news that they are more connected to the world, the recipients are also likely to be put into a dilemma where they can hardly apply themselves to completing some tasks requiring consistent focus.

Article Framework Examples

First Paragraph

  • It is common these days that ...
  • It is quite common that ...
  • Nowadays, it's common that ...
  • These days, it seems that ...
  • However some people are suspicious for this phenomenon, claiming that ...
  • Personally, there are good reason in support of this idea
  • Personally, I'am disapproved of this idea arguing that (and believe) ...
  • However, I personally believe that ...
  • As far as I am concerned, there are good reason in support of ...

Second Paragraph

  • To begin with
  • First of all

Third Paragraph

  • In addition
  • Secondly

Fourth Paragraph

  • In my view
  • In summary
  • In conclusion

Model Sentence Structure Comparison

sth. has dramatically changed ...sth. has brought significant changes to ...
people still disagree about whether ... good or badthere remains some disagreement as to whether ... positive or negative

Good Articles for Reference

1. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Most of leaders and directors of organizations are older people. Some people think it is better to have young people for these positions. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is quite common that most of leaders and directors of organizations are older people. However, some people are suspicious of this phenomenon, claiming that young people are more suitable for these positions. Personally, there are good reasons in support of this idea.

To begin with, with the majority of youngsters leading the positions of directors, organizations will benefit from these energetic, creative and acute brains. According to one of the Steve Job’s famous remarks, ‘Innovation distinguishes between a leader and a follower’, which stresses the significance of innovation in modern society, youngsters, armed with the creative power much stronger than the older people, are able to make contributions to what they work for. Hence, the organizations are more likely to maintain their advantaged positions in the fierce competition in various areas and have their affairs in good management.

In addition, there is also need for the courage of going off beaten track owned by young people in the decision-making of organizations. Although older people may be more experienced than the young, yet they would also more easily find themselves stuck in the maze of the outdated thoughts, afraid of the absolutely new situation out of control. To be specific, the young leader of Alibaba Mayun captured the enormous values of electronic payment in the early advent of Information Revolution, largely attributing to his genius insight. Nevertheless, ironically, many experienced, old senior executives in his company sniffed at it at that time. Therefore, Not only the old organizations but many emerged ones today do need the courage of youngsters thinking out of box, surrounded by the rapidly changing environment.

In my view, electing young people to be leaders and directors of organizations is of greater importance. Specifically, not only can they provide the energetic force for the organizations but show courage in breaking routine and restriction.

Some people claim that public museums and art gallery will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works by using computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is common these days that the advanced technology called AR-museum shows historical objects and works on the screen. Therefore, some people hold the opinion that public museums and art gallery will not be needed. Personally, I am disapproved of this idea, arguing (and believe) that it is necessary to maintain physical exhibition in spite of the access to the digital one.

Undoubtedly, with AR technology, the visitors can explore the museums and gallery in an unprecedentedly new way which deeply impresses them. To be specific, when it was launched, the AR Imperial Palace designed by 3D virtual materials was (have become) popular with nearly all tourists because every frescoes, constructions, antiques, and even the tiny details was (can be) displayed on the computer screen. Moreover, not like restricted vision in front of historical relics, people are able to have an overall look of them just easily click (by easily clicking) the mouse. Besides, they can also enjoy the sound of guidance while wandering through the virtual palace.

However, the historical, artistic and appreciation value of public museums and arts gallery cannot be ignored, which are not (cannot be) simply replaced by the electronic way. Firstly, they create a place for people to immerse themselves in the history and arts with promoting an atmosphere of humanity. Moreover, historical objects and works, regarded as first hand (first-hand) information, are significant for research value rather than ornamental value because we cannot have an intensive study on them in an electronic form. Therefore, museums and art gallery are a part of priceless treasures in society and they deserve respect and protection.

In conclusion, the exist (existence) of real exhibition is of great significant though we benefit a lot from computer technology. From my perspective, not only can they make society full of humanity but also (they can) lead a better research in archaeology.

2. Discuss both views(sides) and give your own opinion.

Some people believe countries have moral obligation to help each other, others worry about the money cannot get to the poor of this world. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, it’s common that globally mutual help has expanded to every corner of the world. Some people argue that countries have moral obligation to help each other while others hold a different opinion that the poor of this world cannot receive what they urgently demand especially money. As far as I am concerned, there are good reasons in support of both of them in a dialectical way.

First of all (段首连接词不准确), with the help from other countries for moral obligation, the civilians of the aided countries will have a better life(跑题). Specifically, for the reason that the assistance is given with moral and voluntary purposes, the receivers ought not to compensate in any other ways. Hence, the countries which benefit from this finance are able to enhance the cityscape(资助的钱用来美化城市?跳跃) and improve public infrastructure and service (缺乏例子), creating a better life for their civilians.

Moreover(段首连接词), in this kind of country’s layer of assistance, the specific groups such as the poor are easily ignored. To further illustrate this point, I would like to take the aid that America had ever given to the Europe as an example. Because of the financial crisis after World War II, the unaffected America gave financial fund to the Europe countries in social welfare, medical security, banking and so on. However, the lowest level of the society especially the poor were be forgotten, finding it difficult to get a job or even a place to live.

In my opinion, two groups of people state their standpoints from their own perspective. As the old saying goes, every coin has two sides and there are no exception about the globally mutual help. In order to resolve the contradiction, governments ought to pay equal attention to macro level about national help and micro level towards to the poor.

Some people think that cultural traditions may be destroyed when they are used as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Others believe it is the only way to save these traditions. Discuss on both sides and give your opinion.

(2015.12.19 IELTS Task2)

Nowadays, it is common that many tourist attractions treat their cultural traditions as money-making attractions aimed at tourists. Some people argue that it is harmful to nature of original culture while others hold different opinion that it is the only to save these traditions. As far as I am concerned, I would agree with the latter (与结尾段观点不一致).

Firstly, the adequate funds which are(简洁性) earned from cultural attractions make contributions to the development of tradition. For instance, the Ancient City of Ping Yao in China, as World Heritage Site, are well preserved so far for the reason that it invests a large sum of money earned from tourism into rebuilding and protecting the relics in the city. //Moreover, with the rapid development of urbanization and economy, many traditional and indigenous cultures faced with cultural assimilation and heritage destruction are dying out. Since the trend cannot be stopped, to save them it is necessary to integrate itself(themselves) into the economic ecosystem like establishing money-making display of traditions(integrate them into economic system 为什么就能保护它们?严密性不足).// 扣题—关键词出现不够

Admittedly, there may be some bad effects when the cultural traditions are exploited for profitable purposes. To be specific, without the attention of (?) the delicate features of the traditional relics and culture, the crowd pours (that pours) into tourist attraction may probably damage the structure of prehistoric buildings, the ecological environment of relics as well as people’s traditional, natural and peaceful lifestyle. Nevertheless, these can be solved by the restriction to tourists’ visit and regulation about tourists’ behaviors, which cannot be problems of the open of traditional remains for money-making aims.

As the old saying goes, every coins(coin) have two sides, and using cultural traditions as a way of earning money also has advantages and disadvantages. From my perspective, the pros outweigh the cons and we should not only gain profit through the money-making attractions but also keep them well preserved.

Some people prefer to help and support directly to those in their local community who need it. Others, however, prefer to give money to national and international charitable organizations. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, it is common that national and international charitable organizations to which people prefer to give money are influential to human society. However, some people are suspicious of this phenomenon(this phenomenon指的是organizations are influential to human society;出现了逻辑的矛盾,前面那句背景句写错了;应该拿下划线做主句部分), arguing that the supportive funds should be given directly to those who need it. Personally, I think donating to related charities is more reasonable.

Admittedly, (+there are good reasons why) many people choose to fund for those in need in a direct way instead of through specialized institute for distrust and uncertainties. To be specific, Guo Meimei, claiming that she was the top manager of the Red Cross Society of China, boasted online about her lavish lifestyle. Regardless of the result of investigation(?), there were many problems appearing in this incident such as the lack of supervision in staff management and the invisible process of cash flow. Hence, this(衔接手段重复) led to a wide distrust in Chinese charitable organizations and it’s similar situation that world wide charities are faces with. (+强调观点-扣题)

However, in spite of the negative factors above, we ought to realize the limits of our individuals. Only with the professional aid and facilities provided by global charitable organizations can the money help those in need efficiently and properly. This is due to the fact that most of our individuals have no experience in salvation. For instance, in Wenchuan earthquake in 2008, many enthusiastic people were gathering together to reach the disaster area to give them(victims) help but for(due to) useless tools and poor rescue experience, they did nothing until the professional charitable rescue teams arrived. These teams were aided by the money that people gave to the charities. (+强调观点-扣题)

In my view, it’s a wiser and sensible to donate to national and international charities instead of giving help and support directly because its pros outweigh its cons. Not only can the lack of supervision be corrected by intensifying management, but also the invisible process of cash flow can be cleared by strict regulation(没有解释清楚).


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